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FreeTheGeekMan
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Me again. Always happy to hear what I could have done better.

I had an idea for this with a basic star wars build I had put together. Really wanted to frame an officer with the door frame. I liked his uneasy expression and thought it would suit this lonely scene.

I really struggled with light and specifically reflections on this. I used snapseed to try and hide a bit of a reflection of my finger but it's the first thing I see when I look at this now. Also I possibly lost a bit too much background detail. What do you guys think? Open to any and all feedback. Thanks.

I took this on my Samsung S9 btw.

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Keith_Lowry
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I think a bit more contrast would have helped - to make the black floor darker and the highlights pop a bit more

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FreeTheGeekMan
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Thanks @keithfisherzz9 I'll give that a try.

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Keith_Lowry
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It‚Äôs already a great composition with the doorway framing the shot. And I never noticed the reflection tbh ūüôā

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FreeTheGeekMan
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Thanks so much. I did go back and play with the contrast on that pic and it did make it stand out s little better. But i think I needed more light on my original shit because the face got too dark. Good to know for next time though thanks

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davidgrafika
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Good composition, maybe I'd include more of the door top and down.

Can you give us the details of your lighting set-up?

You're unhappy because of the reflection, but quite often, it's a matter of where the light hits the bricks, and which angle it has with the camera.

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FreeTheGeekMan
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Hi @david thanks for the feedback. I think you are right about including the top and bottom of the door frame. I think in trying to get it right for an Instagram square I sacrificed that. 

Also details of my lighting set up:

1. The Sun

2. My hand to block the sun

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Clearly room for improvement on that front!

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symbiosys.bricks
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Frames within frames within frame, love it! I think you could do a bit more with creative color grading,  if you want to say lonely it say drop the saturation real low but not quite zero. Good job!

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This is obe of my favourite photos. Period. It's great. I went and played around with the light for awhile and ended changing nothing. I like the low constrast, it feels like the film. The saturation is great, it doesn't have a ton as it is, and dropping even a couple points makes it feel flat.

So... how can this photo be improved? IMO, rotate 0.5 degrees counterclockwise to straighten the lines and a slight crop in from the bottom right to remove the light line in the floor at the very bottom and perfect the centering of the console.

Beautiful photo. Wish i took it. Glad you did.

 

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FreeTheGeekMan
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@therearefourlegos wow thanks so much! Glad you liked the pic so much and thanks so much for sharing you have made my day ????.

Good call on the rotation. Think my moc was maybe a bit wonky and the lines dont all match which didn't help.

I still see a few things wrong with this pic every time I look at it but I still like it a lot and it's defo one of my fave pics of my own. Thanks again!

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OneSixShooter
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I love the composition, the expression and the slightly turned away head - he really does look bored and lonely! I'm not one to shoot with the sun too much (at least not as often as I shoot in the studio). I think if I were lighting this, I would have tried to get a little bluish light below him (maybe a small light/lumecube or flashlight behind him that bounces off the area surrounding him) to simulate the light from the control panels, and then some warmer ambient light above. It might feel more "Star Wars" to me, but that may not be what you want! Still a great shot!

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FreeTheGeekMan
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Thanks for the feedback @onesixshooter all good suggestions. I don't think I'm quite st the level to achieve the things you suggest but hopefully I will get there one day.

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